Analysis Of An Essay: China's Trip To Sri Lanka

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There are some very good ideas present in this essay however, it is overshadowed by a long narrative. This does not clearly answer to the prompt because it doesn’t show a background, identity, interest or talent that is meaningful to you in your essay. I do have a few suggestions as to how we can develop an idea, which will strengthen the overall essay. Consider this direction:
• Provide a brief description of your life in China prior to this trip to Sri Lanka. How did you Chinese background affect your view on human interactions or interactions with people who are different from you? What impact did this experience have on that view? Provide clear and concise examples. What challenges did you face when interacting with the other volunteers?