1st Body Paragraph Red=topic sentence. Transition word followed by one of the reasons given in the thesis. Notice the supporting details! Strong support due to researched facts! Boxed words are transition words.
Imagine you are taking a math test, but you just cannot concentrate. You crave a piece of gum to help you focus, but it is against the rules at school. However, there are many benefits to chewing gum at school, including helping students stay on task and performing better on tests. One reason we should have gum at school is because it helps in keeping students awake.
When I am at school, I witness many students looking sleepy or wanting to fall asleep. The solution to this predicament is gum. According to a scientific study by Kathleen Melanson from
The University of Rhode Island, when you chew gum your metabolism increases by 20 percent. (Source: www.medicalnewstoday.com) When someone’s metabolism is raised, they are more likely to stay awake. This evidence shows that gum needs to be allowed at school to help students stay awake. Furthermore, gum can assist students concentration. Research has shown that the movement you make when you chew gum makes your brain think it is going to get food. Then, insulin, which enhances learning and memory, is released to the brain and helps it focus. (Andrew Scholey, Swinburne University, http://www.medicalnewstoday.com). In the U.S. military, soldiers have chewed gum since
World War I to improve their concentration. (Wrigley Company). This research makes it clear that gum needs to be allowed at school to improve student concentration.
Second, permitting gum chewing at school will help improve student test scores. According to research conducted by the American Society for Nutrition, students who chewed gum during class during a 14week period had a significant increase in test scores and received a better finishing grade compared to those who did not chew gum. Improvement on test scores is a strong reason for why schools should