Email Grading Essay

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Email 1:
Mrs. Cynthia may I have final on Sunday? coz Im going home on Wednesday morning my flight is 6:30
Email Portfolio Rubric E = excellent (12 points) OK = acceptable (6 points) NI = needs improvement (0 points) E OK NI OK Is my subject line clear? The subject line is good but it does not specify of which class and which course and of which year.
The subject line could be good if it contains, the class name, course name and the year, in which student is pursuing his course.

NI
Is the way I begin my email appropriate in light of my relationship to my recipient? (i.e. Are my greeting and first sentence(s) appropriate?) To address the professor Mrs.Cynthia its informal. The professor of higher status should be addressed in a respectful way such as Dear Prof.Cynthia.

NI
Is the body of my email polite and appropriate in light of my relationship to my recipient? (e.g. Do I use "politeness markers" where they're needed? Do I explain why I'm making my request or why whatever I'm apologizing for happened? Do I show respect for my email recipient's time by getting to the point quickly? Do I avoid inappropriately informal language?) The body of the email is not formal and not polite. The email should be polite and formal when it was written to a professor.

NI
Is the way I end my email appropriate in light of my relationship to my recipient?(i.e. Are my final sentence/paragraph and closing appropriate?) The ending of the email is not appropriate. It doesn’t consider the receiver’s time for reading the email. There is no respect and formal writing in the email.

NI
Do I use an appropriate automatic email signature? The automatic email signature is not used. The email signature should contain name and the student’s department details.

NI
Does my email clearly communicate what I want to say? (e.g. Does it use appropriate transition words to clearly communicate the relationship between my ideas?—See SRW, pp. 7-11, 56-57, 94-99, 118-119) It doesn’t communicate clearly, The email didn’t specify the dates, the email says the flight is at 630 but didn’t mention the AM/PM. There is no proper punctutation.

NI
Does my email avoid COCA-correctable errors? No. The email uses coz Im going. There are punctuation errors.

NI
Do I show politeness by avoiding easy-to-correct errors such as those involving capitalization, spelling, or punctuation? (FYI: In English emails, especially in professional contexts, the presence of "easy to fix" errors in capitalization, spelling, or punctuation can suggest to readers that a writer doesn't think his/her readers are worth even the minimal time required to check and fix these "easily-correctable" mistakes! That is, such errors suggest to readers that a writer disrespects them.) No signs of politeness at all. There are spelling mistakes, punctuation errors etc. Email 2:

hi my professor by Monica Richards - Thursday, August 7, 2014, 12:50 PM Dear my professor
I am very happy to join your class (605), and I learn a lot of things from this class. It is very helpful and useful for me.
Since I am working on my term paper for this class, I wish that you could help me to look at it and give me some advice about it. Your suggestion will help me to improve and adjust my thinking for this article, so please send an e-mail to me after you go through it. By the way, if it is not boring to you, please give me your response before Oct. 10th. I will very appreciate your help.
Thank you very much for your time.
Best Regards,
Hao Li
(adapted from Cynthia Myers)

Email Portfolio Rubric E = excellent (12 points) OK = acceptable (6 points) NI = needs improvement (0 points) E OK NI OK

Is my subject line clear? The subject line is ok. It doesn’t specify why the meeting is necessary and where is the meeting. E

Is the way I begin my email appropriate in light of my relationship to…