MLA Argument Essay

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Pages: 2

Firstly, I want to point out that although the MLA is formatted right, the works cited and heading need some revision. The works cited has some unneeded spaces, some parts are indented as they should be, and the citation for “Puritans in America…” should be put first, before “Women in Puritan…”. As for the heading, you should look at the Purdue OWL sample paper. I just realized that I also didn’t do my paper’s heading the right way. Another thing I wanted to point out is the title, make sure the “her” is capitalized in your final revision. Secondly, there are quite a few grammar mistakes. Some words need to be fixed and there are unnecessary spaces throughout the paper. I recommend that you use paperrater.com and/or Grammarly.com. They're both …show more content…
It is structured well, but I feel like the first sentences could be fixed to hook the reader in more. I wish I could be more specific, it looks fine to me other than that, even if another person may feel that it needs more. Therefore, don’t take my words too seriously, since intro and conclusion paragraphs are my weak points. If you feel like it’s good enough and that the teacher will be satisfied, then keep it the way it is. That said, I’ll move on to the thesis. I feel that it is a good statement, but you should word it differently so that it transitions well from the sentence before it. As for the body paragraphs, they are well structured and do support your thesis, but the topic sentences need some work. You could probably make them transition smoothly and support your claim better. Not only that, but I feel that the first paragraphs were too informational, you could’ve integrated more of the poem, to make the first paragraphs less informational and they would’ve been more of a discussion than just fact giving paragraph. I really hope I’m making sense. Other than all of what I mentioned in these paragraphs, your essay overall is well structured, organized, and has a clear