June 14, 2015
Vagueness, Ambiguity, and Clarity in Writing
Example 2 says “I was thrown from my truck as it left the road. I was later found in a ditch by a flock of wild turkeys.” The sentences are passive voice not active when it should be written in active voice. The example does not give a lot of description or detail. The part I found vague is how it did not state how the person thrown from the truck. Were they ejected as a result of an accident? Were they thrown from the truck by another person? The part I found ambiguous is was the person found outside of the truck in the ditch or inside of the truck in the ditch?
Example seven says “It is unfortunate to be convicted when innocent at least if convicted for a jail sentence there is possibility new evidence can emerge a free you from this terrible error. I am sure either sentence for murder does not go well with you if you are truly innocent. I know I would rather have the opportunity that the new evidence could free me from this horrid mistake. Now is not capital punishment an in human act. Think about it watching and taking enjoyment out of watching someone die because of your desire for revenge. Our humanity has come a long way since the era of an eye for eye. We as people of this era in time have a responsibility to value all human life.” There are run-ons and misspellings in this example. The point of view jumps from first person to third person and then to second person. There is no