Original: Aristotle states that tragic heroes aren’t completely good. They have a good mind and reputation; yet, they lead themselves into a downfall.
Revised: “The change in the hero’s fortunes must be not from misery to happiness, but on the contrary from happiness to misery; and the cause of it must lie not in any depravity, but in some great error on his part.” (Aristotle)
Reflection: Beginning with a quote helps with the transition towards whether or not John Proctor is considered a tragic hero according to Aristotle’s views. In addition, there is more credibility in the essay when a quote is provided. It shows that the essay isn’t only based on opinion.
Original: Aristotle believed that every hero had a flaw and used Oedipus as an example. Oedipus and John are alike. Their flaw was having too much pride. Throughout the book, John’s actions express his opinions and creates a road to his death, making him a tragic hero.
Revised: Aristotle believed that every hero had a flaw and proceeded to use Oedipus as an example. Oedipus and John are alike in many ways. They were both men of noble stature and their flaw was having too much pride. Throughout the play, John’s actions express his opinions and create a road to his death, making him a tragic hero.
Reflections: Diction was changed to create a better flow while reading. Adding stature into the paragraph helped to identify one of the many parts of being a tragic hero instead of trying to define it using different words. The Crucible is also a play, not a book, therefore, that had to be changed to make the essay accurate.
Original: His life got worse as time went by. His need for revenge on Abigail is when his fall of grace had started. He confessed to committing adultery. Mary also turned against him and accused him of convincing her to go to the dark side. He then got arrested and had the choice of confessing and saving his life or accepting execution.
Revised: His life got worse as time went by. His fall from grace had started when he confessed to committing adultery, which led to him getting arrested. “I have not moved from there to there without I think to please you, and still an everlasting funeral marches round your heart. I cannot speak but I am doubted, every moment judged for lies, as though I come into a court when I come into this house!” (Proctor) He had acknowledged his sin and began making decisions based off of his need for relief. He wanted to let go of the guilt and feel cathartic. He had the choice of saving his life by